Bacon, Eggs, and Thou
O Eggs! O Bacon! How I lust for thee!Each wonderful alone, together bliss!O Breakfast! If sweet sleep must sundered be,how well am I consoled to eat like this!O Pig! Thy finest hour comes at...
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Zeke,What a noble tribute to a grand repast. I like the "err e'er line and the couplet carries a fine contrast to the pig line. I guess the "do" in the penultimate line is deliberate, so I won't even...
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This is a delight to read...I have no nits, but it did make me hungry for some bacon and eggs for breakfast. I'm on my way now.Sue******************To have great poetry there must be great audiences,...
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Delicious. It brought W.S.`s sonnet 75 up in my mind"this sonnet to my thoughts as food to life," may Shakespeare forgive meregards Willi
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Fun schtuff, Zeke! I thoroughly enjoyed seeing you pig out on exclamation marks and archaisms. Harmless gluttony at its best. Not fond of L12, though. (If you ask me, "such" is the least poetic word...
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Zeke,I know this is a light poem, but I feel it's spoiled by the fact you haven't integrated the 'Thou' into it, as far as I can see. At least some mention of 'Thou' in the morning, or at the...
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Zeke, I love idea of a breakfast sonnet! This is very nicely done, but agree with Maz that there needs to be more integration between the octet and sestet. I wanted food toward the end, maybe in the...
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Thanks, all! I'd thought the entire sestet was abut "thou", after a real live volta for a change. Still, a feature that only the author can see is no way to sell popcorn. Lemme think about it//Zeke
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Zeke,Yes, I realise the sestet concerns 'Thou', but have you connected Thou to the breakfast hours? If so, I've missed it. I think the turn has to come more out of the octave, rather than from a...
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This sets the juices running. Here, in the middle of Ramadan and in the Middle East, bacon is but a distant memory! - Dave
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Zeke, you said a mirthful. I doubt, though, the Heart Foundation would be amused.I'm struggling with the syntax here:O sweet my love, companion of my days,within thine arms this mortal's nearest...
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